Writers: You are very much needed, care to lend your talent?

April 24th, 2011

The worst part of writing for me is starting a story. So I need your help!
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Basic Summary:
Trinity and her parents are traveling to Ireland to attend her sister, Jessica’s, wedding. Trinity arrives a week after the parents because she had to stay and write final exams. When she arrives at her sister’s large mansion, almost everyone is asleep. She settles into her new room and quickly falls asleep. When she goes downstairs for breakfast, she is surprised to see a different family than her own sitting at the breakfast table – especially the gorgeous boy at the end of the nook. Jessica dances in and introduces everyone and how they know each other – The Wilson’s are long time friends with Paxton. They are staying to help set up the wedding.

Trinity spends time with the Wilson’s, especially Alec and Gabriel. Gabriel and Trinity become romantically involved – even going as far as sex. She begins to notice something odd about the boys – they do not seem human. She asks Gabriel about it – confronting him with the fact that she knows he is not human, but cannot put her finger on it. Gabriel cuts off their friendship, giving her the complete silent treatment. Sad, confused, and hurting – she goes to Gabriel’s father, Eldon. Eldon is astounded to hear her story, but does not touch the subject as to what they are. Suddenly, Gabriel brings another girl around. Frustrated and sad inside, Trinity plans a shopping trip into town with Jessica – to talk to her about Gabriel. Then she meets a cute cashier and asks him to hang out. Gabriel is furious about it; he completely locks the door between their two rooms. The day before the wedding, Trinity bursts into his room, in tears, demanding him to tell her the truth about everything. Therefore, he does. They get back together blah blah blah. Then, in the end, Trinity has to find a way to get Gabriel and his family to the Other side – because they are stuck as ghosts.
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Anyway, I need your help with how to start it. I want Trinity to arrive late at night, while it’s raining, by cab. She knocks on the door and her sister answers.

That’s it ^^

I know what I want, I just don’t know how to word it properly. I’m really hoping you’ll answer. Just write a little paragraph like you would if this were your story.
Thanks!
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Jessica = Trinity’s sister.
Paxton = Jessica’s fiance.
Alec = Gabriel’s brother
Gabriel = Trinity’s soon to be love interest.
Eldon = Alec’s & Gabriel’s father.
Celia= Alec’s & Gabriel’s sister.
Carla= Alec’s & Gabriel’s mother.

One Response to “Writers: You are very much needed, care to lend your talent?”

  1. Pickled Emerald says:

    I don’t know… Whether or not you’re writing this in third or first. I’m going to assume first.

    “Shards of rain stabbed at the cab window as it pulled into a hedge-lined driveway. I gazed at the imposing mansion in awe; was this really the right place? I knew Paxton’s family was well off, but this was a whole new dimension of wealth. I paid the cab driver his fare, smiling as politely as I could muster. I stepped out into the inky black night, feeling suffocated by its intensity. I pulled my coat over my head and ran across the slick cobblestones, trying to avoid the inevitable onslaught of rain. I knocked on the door harshly, huddling against the penetrating cold. A dulled yellow glow spilled out from a second-storey window. Someone was responding to my hurried knocks after all. Jessica lazily opened the door, yawning as she did so. As soon as she registered who I was, she squealed in delight and catapulted herself into my frozen arms.”

    Sorry, I know that is really terrible.
    I don’t really feel myself today, and that shows.
    Hopefully it’ll give you some inspiration though?

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Writers: You are very much needed, care to lend your talent?

April 24th, 2011

The worst part of writing for me is starting a story. So I need your help!
—–
Basic Summary:
Trinity and her parents are traveling to Ireland to attend her sister, Jessica’s, wedding. Trinity arrives a week after the parents because she had to stay and write final exams. When she arrives at her sister’s large mansion, almost everyone is asleep. She settles into her new room and quickly falls asleep. When she goes downstairs for breakfast, she is surprised to see a different family than her own sitting at the breakfast table – especially the gorgeous boy at the end of the nook. Jessica dances in and introduces everyone and how they know each other – The Wilson’s are long time friends with Paxton. They are staying to help set up the wedding.

Trinity spends time with the Wilson’s, especially Alec and Gabriel. Gabriel and Trinity become romantically involved – even going as far as sex. She begins to notice something odd about the boys – they do not seem human. She asks Gabriel about it – confronting him with the fact that she knows he is not human, but cannot put her finger on it. Gabriel cuts off their friendship, giving her the complete silent treatment. Sad, confused, and hurting – she goes to Gabriel’s father, Eldon. Eldon is astounded to hear her story, but does not touch the subject as to what they are. Suddenly, Gabriel brings another girl around. Frustrated and sad inside, Trinity plans a shopping trip into town with Jessica – to talk to her about Gabriel. Then she meets a cute cashier and asks him to hang out. Gabriel is furious about it; he completely locks the door between their two rooms. The day before the wedding, Trinity bursts into his room, in tears, demanding him to tell her the truth about everything. Therefore, he does. They get back together blah blah blah. Then, in the end, Trinity has to find a way to get Gabriel and his family to the Other side – because they are stuck as ghosts.
——–

Anyway, I need your help with how to start it. I want Trinity to arrive late at night, while it’s raining, by cab. She knocks on the door and her sister answers.

That’s it ^^

I know what I want, I just don’t know how to word it properly. I’m really hoping you’ll answer. Just write a little paragraph like you would if this were your story.
Thanks!
—-
Jessica = Trinity’s sister.
Paxton = Jessica’s fiance.
Alec = Gabriel’s brother
Gabriel = Trinity’s soon to be love interest.
Eldon = Alec’s & Gabriel’s father.
Celia= Alec’s & Gabriel’s sister.
Carla= Alec’s & Gabriel’s mother.

One Response to “Writers: You are very much needed, care to lend your talent?”

  1. Pickled Emerald says:

    I don’t know… Whether or not you’re writing this in third or first. I’m going to assume first.

    “Shards of rain stabbed at the cab window as it pulled into a hedge-lined driveway. I gazed at the imposing mansion in awe; was this really the right place? I knew Paxton’s family was well off, but this was a whole new dimension of wealth. I paid the cab driver his fare, smiling as politely as I could muster. I stepped out into the inky black night, feeling suffocated by its intensity. I pulled my coat over my head and ran across the slick cobblestones, trying to avoid the inevitable onslaught of rain. I knocked on the door harshly, huddling against the penetrating cold. A dulled yellow glow spilled out from a second-storey window. Someone was responding to my hurried knocks after all. Jessica lazily opened the door, yawning as she did so. As soon as she registered who I was, she squealed in delight and catapulted herself into my frozen arms.”

    Sorry, I know that is really terrible.
    I don’t really feel myself today, and that shows.
    Hopefully it’ll give you some inspiration though?

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Writers: You are very much needed, care to lend your talent?

April 24th, 2011

The worst part of writing for me is starting a story. So I need your help!
—–
Basic Summary:
Trinity and her parents are traveling to Ireland to attend her sister, Jessica’s, wedding. Trinity arrives a week after the parents because she had to stay and write final exams. When she arrives at her sister’s large mansion, almost everyone is asleep. She settles into her new room and quickly falls asleep. When she goes downstairs for breakfast, she is surprised to see a different family than her own sitting at the breakfast table – especially the gorgeous boy at the end of the nook. Jessica dances in and introduces everyone and how they know each other – The Wilson’s are long time friends with Paxton. They are staying to help set up the wedding.

Trinity spends time with the Wilson’s, especially Alec and Gabriel. Gabriel and Trinity become romantically involved – even going as far as sex. She begins to notice something odd about the boys – they do not seem human. She asks Gabriel about it – confronting him with the fact that she knows he is not human, but cannot put her finger on it. Gabriel cuts off their friendship, giving her the complete silent treatment. Sad, confused, and hurting – she goes to Gabriel’s father, Eldon. Eldon is astounded to hear her story, but does not touch the subject as to what they are. Suddenly, Gabriel brings another girl around. Frustrated and sad inside, Trinity plans a shopping trip into town with Jessica – to talk to her about Gabriel. Then she meets a cute cashier and asks him to hang out. Gabriel is furious about it; he completely locks the door between their two rooms. The day before the wedding, Trinity bursts into his room, in tears, demanding him to tell her the truth about everything. Therefore, he does. They get back together blah blah blah. Then, in the end, Trinity has to find a way to get Gabriel and his family to the Other side – because they are stuck as ghosts.
——–

Anyway, I need your help with how to start it. I want Trinity to arrive late at night, while it’s raining, by cab. She knocks on the door and her sister answers.

That’s it ^^

I know what I want, I just don’t know how to word it properly. I’m really hoping you’ll answer. Just write a little paragraph like you would if this were your story.
Thanks!
—-
Jessica = Trinity’s sister.
Paxton = Jessica’s fiance.
Alec = Gabriel’s brother
Gabriel = Trinity’s soon to be love interest.
Eldon = Alec’s & Gabriel’s father.
Celia= Alec’s & Gabriel’s sister.
Carla= Alec’s & Gabriel’s mother.

One Response to “Writers: You are very much needed, care to lend your talent?”

  1. Pickled Emerald says:

    I don’t know… Whether or not you’re writing this in third or first. I’m going to assume first.

    “Shards of rain stabbed at the cab window as it pulled into a hedge-lined driveway. I gazed at the imposing mansion in awe; was this really the right place? I knew Paxton’s family was well off, but this was a whole new dimension of wealth. I paid the cab driver his fare, smiling as politely as I could muster. I stepped out into the inky black night, feeling suffocated by its intensity. I pulled my coat over my head and ran across the slick cobblestones, trying to avoid the inevitable onslaught of rain. I knocked on the door harshly, huddling against the penetrating cold. A dulled yellow glow spilled out from a second-storey window. Someone was responding to my hurried knocks after all. Jessica lazily opened the door, yawning as she did so. As soon as she registered who I was, she squealed in delight and catapulted herself into my frozen arms.”

    Sorry, I know that is really terrible.
    I don’t really feel myself today, and that shows.
    Hopefully it’ll give you some inspiration though?

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